Update:
Draft 3 has been superseded by Draft
4 (posted 12 November 2016).
Summary & Reader Response for Article: LTA – Draft 2
In the news release titled “Trains
on the North-South and East-West Lines Safe for Service”, the Land Transport
Authority (LTA, 2016) wrote that despite undergoing replacement works, the
trains that have been in the media spotlight are safe for service. According to
LTA, all new trains are tested before they are put into service. For defective trains,
immediate action was taken to prevent defects from resurfacing during train
operation. Hairline cracks that were also discovered during inspection were confirmed
to not affect operational safety. Nevertheless, to ensure that there are
sufficient trains for commuters, all affected trains were sent back, one at a
time, for rectification. Stringent checks will also be performed regularly to ensure
operational safety of all trains. However, although the LTA claimed to have exercised
diligence and accountability in its corrective processes for the defective
trains in question, there would have been no need for such action had it
improved upon its pre-deployment checks.
The LTA’s news release suggests
that it took well-planned steps to eliminate the possibility of future problems
for the battery housing component by improving the housing design as well as
engaging a different supplier. However, the news release fails to describe in
similar fashion the steps to rectify the issue of the cracked draughtscreens. The
LTA could have better described its “appropriate action” taken by including details,
instead of leaving them to the reader’s conjecture. One such example could be
adding the arrival of a conclusion: whether it was the manufacturer’s
installation process that had to be subject to proper review and revision or if
it was negligence from the manufacturer, for the sake of convenience, that led
to the installation error despite the installation process being reviewed and
approved. Unfortunately, the omission of details such as these in the report may
have inadvertently led to questions raised concerning the credibility of LTA’s
quality checks. Such was the case when the People’s Power Party (2016) demanded
further clarification from LTA as to whether it performed any “due diligence on
quality checks” for the trains in question before deploying them.
The LTA’s news release also attempts
to alleviate any concerns from the public by asserting that there were no
adverse effects of the hairline cracks, which were discovered during routine
inspection, on operational safety. To substantiate this statement, the LTA claims
to have sought advice from its engineers, as well as the contractor and an
external assessor. To further show that the LTA prioritizes safety over
deployment availability, the news release mentions that despite presenting no
risk to operational safety, the defective trains are being sent back to the
factory for replacement works. However, the discovery of such a defect only
serves to show that there have been lapses in quality control, as these
hairline cracks were found to be caused by impurities in the material used
during manufacturing. In an interview with former Kowloon-Canton Railway
Corporation’s Acting CEO Samuel Lai Man-hay (2016), he stated that these
defects show that the “quality control of the entire manufacturing process” may
be compromised. Therefore, the LTA should have conducted more comprehensive
checks so as to ensure that defective trains are not being hastily deployed in order
to meet operational needs.
In conclusion, although the news
release strives to show that the issues with the defective trains are swiftly
dealt with by the LTA, it is important that the LTA continues to endeavour to
maintain high safety standards. Commuters’ expectations regarding public
transport in Singapore may have grown as a result of being accustomed to train reliability
for over two decades (Tan, 2015), and the LTA must consider that the investment
of resources into improving pre-deployment processes is more efficient in the
long run, as compared to expenditure on corrective processes to fix a problem
that could have been prevented in the first place.
References:
Christopher Tan (2015). MRT’s
past ‘teething problems’ (2015, December 24). The Straits Times. Retrieved from http://www.straitstimes.com/opinion/mrts-past-teething-problems
Land Transport Authority (2016). Trains
on the North-South and East-West Lines Safe for Service (2016, July 6). Land Transport Authority Press Room.
Retrieved from https://www.lta.gov.sg/apps/news/page.aspx?c=2&id=0f8b1220-0289-4bef-99c9-b2455f17a66c#_ftn1
People’s Power Party (2016). People’s
Power Party’s statement on defective trains from China (2016, July 7). The Online Citizen. Retrieved from http://www.theonlinecitizen.com/2016/07/07/peoples-power-partys-statement-on-defective-trains-from-china/
Samuel Lai Man-hay (2016). Secret
Recalls: China manufacturer for MTR secretly recalls 25 SMRT subway trains
after cracks found (2016, July 5). Interview with FactWire. FactWire News Agency. Retrieved from https://www.factwire.news/en/MTR-securetly-recall.html
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Members for Summary Part:
Chris,
Ali, Ike
Hey Ike, generally your summary presented an amazing overview of the article. This clearly shows that you have an understanding of the content of the article, your transition to your reader's response is smooth which means that your writing is coherent and there is a clarity in backing up your thesis statement.
ReplyDeleteOverall, I personally think it's well written and keep up the good work.
Cheers,
Jerry
Thanks for the comprehensive feedback, Jerry!
DeleteThank you, Ike, for this excellent work. Your summary is comprehensive and accurate, with a well focused thesis, while the response is articulate, well supported and insightful. Reading this was a pleasure.
ReplyDeleteI do have a few comments:
1) Stringent checks will also be performed regularly to ensure operational safety of all trains. >>> (verb tense error) This is info that has been reported in the past. To convey info on something from the past, what modal should you use?
2) adding the arrival of a conclusion >>> (vague phrasing)
3) In an interview with former Kowloon-Canton Railway Corporation’s Acting CEO Samuel Lai Man-hay (2016), he stated...
>>> (phrasing)
In an interview, former Kowloon-Canton Railway Corporation’s Acting CEO Samuel Lai Man-hay (2016) stated
4) Finally, you have included info from very credible sources, but the end-text list of those sources doesn't conform to the APA guideline.
I appreciate the effort!
Thanks Brad, appreciate the comments! I will revisit the APA citation guide and amend my referencing format accordingly.
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